Searing wind gushed through my hair as I drove along the 1-40 connector – my trembling fingers barely able to hold the steering wheel – my life falling apart. My air-conditioner stopped working minutes earlier, adding layers of torment to an already scarring afternoon. I cannot believe they fired me. I went through the memory over and over…how could they care so little? Why does this always happen to me?
In the rear-view mirror I saw a broken man – tears slithering down my saddened face. I was barely able to drive; barely holding onto reality. I’m $37,000.00 in debt – weeks from having my home repossessed – fired from my job of nine years. Every muscle in my body contorted, twisted into strangled knots. Scenes of vehicular suicide played over and over betwixt my wicked theater of thought and the oncoming traffic.
I turned on the radio and a deeply resonant voice calmly throated, “Pull over Bobby…before it’s too late,” and quickly turned it off. I edged into a parking lot near a park and stopped. I called Marianna on my cell phone, trying to find the words; how could I tell her I had been fired in the midst of all this debt? With a baby on the way? I could not stop crying.
“Hello?” she answered.
“It’s me. I’m so sorry baby…” my body convulsing in agony – my stomach tightly wrenched.
“What’s wrong?” she said, “I’m glad you called, I have to tell you something.”
I could only imagine what she needed to say at this unforgettable moment, “Tell me…”
She said in a clear, unemotional, fiercely inhuman tone, “It’s not your baby. I meant to tell you before…but you’re so sensitive. It’s Steve’s baby and I am leaving with him. We are moving away together. I’ve already moved my things – today while you were working – I figured I’d better tell you now before you come home to an empty house…goodbye Bobby.”
I thought I had died. I opened my glove compartment and grasped my pistol – it’s time to end this. I opened my door – my sluggish, whithered body slumped onto the blistering pavement. The scorching blacktop burned my tender flesh – harrowing pain splintered through my agonized soul.
I wrapped my lips around the barrel, cocked the hammer – shivering in a pool of self-hatred. My body quivered so intensely, from the windows of my glass heart – shattered – a fountain of tears…and I sobbed, and I sobbed. I removed the barrel from my lips, and in a moment of soul grinding epiphany I mumbled, “Please God help me…please…”
At that very moment a tiny shadow slightly cooled my face – a cute little 5 year old girl in a tiny red dress stood before me. She said, “Are you alright mister?”
I could not speak. I was paralyzed. She came closer – leaning her tiny head on my shoulder, wiping tears from my cheeks with her petite little fingers. She said, “Everything’s gonna be alright.”
I gurgled words through a sea of tears, “Are you sure? Do you promise me?”
She said, “Yes. All you need is a little love,” and gently kissed me on the cheek. She held a precious little kitten in her arms, “this is Sammy! Here, hold him for a minute.”
I held that beautiful little kitten against my face and he purred, eagerly wanting to be my friend. The girl said, “You’re smiling! See, I told you…all you need is a little love. Me and Sammy gotta go home now. I’m glad you feel better – and now my work is done! Bye-bye! Sammy says bye-bye too.”
She scuffled into obscurity and I never even knew her name. I was so astonished, I forgot to thank her. I put my gun away and got back in my car…finally calm. I saw my face in the rear-view mirror and thought, “I really am going to be alright. I’m gonna be just fine…”
I could not think of a single thing to write about today. I decided to just write a quick story without any planning and just let it fly. I usually spend more time crafting each sentence, but wanted something simple and poetic. I wrote this in seven minutes and did no editing. I actually shed a few tears during the experience…Jeez I’m such a sap. I hope you enjoy:)



#1 by paisley at October 16th, 2008
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there are times in this life,, when spontaneity is definitely the way to go… this was definitely one of those times…….
#2 by teeni at October 16th, 2008
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I think the part of you that is sappy is what makes you such a great writer, Bobby. Being able to put yourself in those character’s shoes makes it easier for you to describe. Just try not to get stuck there in a depressed character’s head too long.
I think this was very well written. It’s hard to believe it was only seven minutes and no editing. Say have you seen the 75-word short fiction contest that Dan at dcrblogs tweeted about? He may have posted about it too but I haven’t seen the post yet.
#3 by Revellian at October 16th, 2008
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@Jodi: So true. This piece was gratifying to write. Thanks for reading!
@Teeni: Thanks so much!
I was unable to pull that post up for some reason but will later today. I’m not much on contests, but I may write something.
#4 by mighty morgan at October 16th, 2008
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Love your stories Bobby! Although your wrote it in seven minutes it still resonates within me. Kindness of strangers sometimes is the very essence of why some us move forward though many of the challenging times of our lives.
I know that is my experience…thanks for reminding me!
#5 by Revellian at October 16th, 2008
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Thanks Morgan! I was hoping you would read this one! A little girl and her kitten seemed like the perfect heroes in a story like this
#6 by ~willow~ at October 16th, 2008
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holy c**p bobby this was a fantastic read. The desperation of you/MC was so powerful it sucked me in immediately… okay the ending was a bit hokey in my eyes (a little contrived, perhaps), but still – excellent piece of 7min writing there, dude
#7 by Revellian at October 16th, 2008
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Thanks Willow! If it seems contrived (obviously planned) it’s because it’s partially true
#8 by Genie Princess at October 17th, 2008
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You wrote this in 7 minutes Bobby? GP is impressed, great work!
#9 by Genie Princess at October 17th, 2008
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I’m glad the little girl helped u out of ur misery in this story, thanks to the kitty too! Hey, maybe u should get one!! A nice fluffy one like Pheebs! What say you?
#10 by Revellian at October 17th, 2008
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Thanks Marzie! I can’t afford a kitten right now, but maybe in a few years when I’m debt free
#11 by Miss Moneypenny at October 17th, 2008
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Hi Bobby!
We have a spare guest room in our cave between the Keebler Elves Oven Tree Factory and Papa Smurf’s Mushroom house.
Papa Smurf is smurfing up a batch of colloidal silver tonic to wash down the elfing good cookies which will help us turn blue for the coronation of Emperor Obama.
#12 by Revellian at October 17th, 2008
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Thanks for the offer, but the state has told me they have a white room and special white jacket awaiting me anytime I snap
#13 by Shinade at October 19th, 2008
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Bobby,
I am so glad you dropped by last night. At first you really had me scared while I was reading.
I thought this was true and not fiction.
It is simply so sweet and very compelling.
A little girl angel with a beautiful little cat has touched your life in a way.
If not then this would not have been written. She’s probably been with you for always but something happened and she let you have just a glimpse of her light.
This is great Bobby. I love it but then you knew I would.
Hugs:-)
#14 by Revellian at October 19th, 2008
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Thanks so much Jackie! Well, this story is partially true and the sentiment is wonderful. I know it started dark, but ended light!!!