Comments on: Voodoo Bellydancer – Mindcraft Ingression

By: Bobby Revell

Bobby Revell — Mon, 18 May 2009 08:50:57 +0000

Very true!

By: Alan

Alan — Mon, 18 May 2009 08:27:39 +0000

Everyone lives – only the best and most determined learn. By learning, we improve.

By: Bobby Revell

Bobby Revell — Mon, 18 May 2009 08:09:52 +0000

I’m editing all my stories when I have time. You live and learn!

By: Alan

Alan — Mon, 18 May 2009 07:59:49 +0000

That’s great – cos they were jabbing me in the eye too! Nothing worse than being pulled out of a powerful narrative by something stylistic.

By: Bobby Revell

Bobby Revell — Mon, 18 May 2009 07:23:23 +0000

Alan, thanks so much for reading.That’s funny you mention that because I actually eliminated a gross overuse of hyphens from two other stories a few days ago but haven’t reedited this one yet. It was a bad habit, no particular reason. While writing my novel and proofreading chapters I became aware of how many I used when they were unnecessary and now when I read these older stories they jab me in the eye hahaha!

By: Alan

Alan — Mon, 18 May 2009 06:30:06 +0000

Good use of language in this one. Why do you choose to use hyphens instead of commas? Presumably a stylistic choice, but what’s the reasoning?

By: Bobby Revell

Bobby Revell — Sat, 16 May 2009 07:22:54 +0000

Thank you Val, I cannot thank you enough for simply reading my work

By: Val

Val — Sat, 16 May 2009 07:15:49 +0000

wow, this is simply beautiful. Very poetic, one of the best pieces of short fiction I’ve come across in a long time.

By: Revellian

Revellian — Thu, 22 Jan 2009 01:38:03 +0000

Aww thanks Meleah! I don’t believe in the idea of talent, just hard, hard work, being true to your own natural abilities and developing them–whatever they may be

By: meleah rebeccah

meleah rebeccah — Wed, 21 Jan 2009 22:16:01 +0000

My goodness. I knew you were talented, but WOW. This was fantastico!