Falling into love
chasm’s deep endless
into one another
catacombs of lonely-together
death as our guide
Climbing up love
crisp warm spire
cool flow sunward
tightrope walkers
under stormed vertex; trembling
To settle down; settle up
or side paths; climaxed horizons
treading desire
journey of obliquity
parallel submersion; supreme into flat
Ingress between love
slabs of rainbows smiling tears
to shroud one another
an uprush sculpture
an inflow release
Explosion of eight winds; frigid gushed inferno
implosion of all sins; together free alone
let’s pay the price
let’s afford the pain
let us burn expansive
and die in the rain
A side-path of passion
slow smolder; churn as ember
weaving affection’s twill
let us design, construct, compose
and just be
symphony of love
Happy Valentine’s Day to all
#1 by Angela at February 14th, 2009
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Beautiful.
#2 by Revellian at February 14th, 2009
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Thank you Angela
#3 by Nina c. at February 14th, 2009
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Beautiful!! I love it honey Happy Valentines Day!
#4 by Revellian at February 14th, 2009
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Thank you Nina, Happy Valentines day!
#5 by Candy at February 14th, 2009
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awesome! nearly erotic… but of course I am deep enough to see more than that.
#6 by Sarah at February 14th, 2009
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Thank you for letting me know about your poem!
I loved it!!!
Keep on writing and sharing!
I loved your poem and feeling in it.
Happy valentine’s day!
Sarah
#7 by Revellian at February 14th, 2009
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@Candy: Thank you! The idea of erotic or being erotic was nowhere near me when I wrote this. But since you mentioned it . . . I see it now. I was thinking in terms of upward souls, but revealed something innately physical about me. You are the deep one.
@Sarah: Thanks so much! Sharing is a wonderful act. Happy Valentine’s to you too!
#8 by Evelyn at February 14th, 2009
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*Sniff* I’m sappy. That’s funny, I did sense the erotic as well. I think we may be looking for it, or you may be type-cast, or maybe it just comes out automatically and you don’t realize it. LOL! I liked it. Thank you and Happy Valentine’s Day to you too!
#9 by Revellian at February 14th, 2009
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Thanks Evelyn! What can I say, I’m a very sensual male hahahaha! Type-cast? I have to be famous first:)
#10 by Jennifer at February 14th, 2009
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Happy Valentine’s Day! This is a beautiful poem, intense as always.
#11 by Revellian at February 14th, 2009
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Aw…thanks Jennifer! Happy Valentine’s Day:)
#12 by Mariuca at February 15th, 2009
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Mmmmmmmm what a lovely poem from u Mr. Revell!
#13 by Mariuca at February 15th, 2009
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I trust u had a nice Valentine’s Day, did u go out on another one of ur bizarre dates? LOL!
#14 by Selma at February 15th, 2009
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There definitely is a symphonic feel and tone to this poem – a very well-chosen title. I like how it builds and can particularly relate to the image of the ‘cool flow sunward/tightrope walkers.’ That sums up love for me. Very nice!
#15 by Revellian at February 15th, 2009
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@Marzie: Thank you Marzie! No more bizarre dates for me. I do a criminal background check on all dates beforehand hahaha!
@Selma: Thank you Selma! That’s actually my favorite line. I haven’t written very many love poems, but when the poem unexpectedly appears in my mind, I must get it on paper before it disappears–and I know you know that magical creative feeling:)
#16 by Miss Moneypenny at February 15th, 2009
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I’m speechless since posting a serious comment here may be viewed as humor. Perhaps, a humorous comment like the Bard of the Bailouts does Romantic comedy, will be viewed as a serious compliment? (wink, wink)
Happy VD (Virile Dreams)
#17 by Revellian at February 15th, 2009
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Hi Debbie! I doubt you’ve ever been speechless you big talker you
Shhhh…don’t tell anyone I have VD (virile dreams)!
#18 by Paula at February 15th, 2009
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#19 by Kima at February 15th, 2009
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hehe, after 17 comments here is me, the first guy to come along and say “love the poem”
Sounds very x rated too, which intensifies the emotions and passion within the poem. Love it!
#20 by Svasti at February 16th, 2009
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So often what we imagine as love, is really just an attempt to shelter from those things we don’t like about ourselves.
Which I think, is one of the themes here in your poem.
Real love (another theme, I think!), is not about hiding, or trying to change or save someone. Its being ourselves in all our glory, nothing concealed and loving the other in return fiercely and brightly. Holding each other up joyously.
#21 by Revellian at February 16th, 2009
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@Paula: Thank You!
@Kima: Thanks! This poem is like one of those 3-D pictures that change when looking at it from different angles:)
@Svasti: Very percipient of you . . . thanks! Love is usually all these things even in the best or worst relationships with ourselves and others. We can fall in love, climb to love–love can fall away or rise–or love can be traversed through side-roads of stability; all possibilities and many directions love’s energy can move:)
#22 by Melinda at February 16th, 2009
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Bobby, I agree with your comment that this poem changes when you read it. I read it three times and came up with different feelings/emotions each time I did. But what I did sense, through each reading was the complex journey of love. A shared love is so many things at differen times, hard, easy, gentle, hard, lost, found, exctasy, and agony.
I loved your poem–absolutely incredible.
Melinda
#23 by Revellian at February 16th, 2009
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Wow…Thank you Melinda! Some say love is simple, others say it’s complex. I say it’s all those things. One thing is clear: life without it is extremely difficult. We all need love!
#24 by JC at February 16th, 2009
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This was great, really refreshing. Your blog brings so many varieties. Cheers!
#25 by Revellian at February 16th, 2009
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Thank you J.C.! I don’t consider myself a great poet and there are many better ones in the blogosphere…but I did enjoy writing this. Cheers!
#26 by Michelle Gartner at February 16th, 2009
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I am going to come back and read this without reading the comments. Or reread it in my reader. I had a perception of what I was thinking when I read it but then I read the comments and it swayed my thinking in a different direction.
That’s the interesting thing about blogging so much more alive then just reading a book about poetry. The side discussions and dialogue.
I trust you had a good Valentine’s Day. Mine was fabulous!
#27 by Revellian at February 16th, 2009
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Hi Michelle! That happens to me all the time. I go to comment and end up commenting about something someone else commented.
I don’t love all poetry and often times the “great” poets revered throughout history bore me to tears. So many people write blog poetry, which is probably why I don’t. If it magically appears in my mind, I will write it–which is what happened with this one:)
#28 by Lulu at February 17th, 2009
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awww love this!!
happy V’s Day, Bob
sorry I am late, better late than never
#29 by Revellian at February 17th, 2009
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Thanks Lulu! Happy belated Valentine’s day to you too!
#30 by Shinade at February 17th, 2009
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Oh Bobby you have been holding out on us. Wow, I didn’t distracted by anyone’s comment. This is a very sensual and erotic piece of writing.
It is one of the loveliest I have ever read. When I finished my urge was to say okay let’s do.
Powerful Bobby…truly powerful!!
I am sorry about getting around so late. Please forgive me. It’s been quite hectic.
Oh my Bobby. And to think this is the last thing I am reading before bed. Whewwwwwwwwww!!!!!
#31 by Melissa Donovan at February 17th, 2009
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What a beautiful poem, dense with rich language and imagery. My favorite parts were the second stanza “Climbing up love” and “tightrope walkers” as well as the last line, which brought the piece full circle. Nice.
#32 by Revellian at February 17th, 2009
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@Jackie: Thank you! Is it really erotic? Haha…it is totally by accident. Whew! LOL!
@Melissa: Thanks so much! I’m not really a big fan of love poetry (probably because I have little confidence it will not be lame lol). I read some love poetry from Yeats earlier and was blown away!
#33 by Ernie Small at February 19th, 2009
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your breath is heavy
with cigarette offerings
and scotch-taped thrift store
mental miracles.
you lay below me
and i pull orgasms out of you
like golden potatoes
buried by god.
we walk arm in arm
like Siamese twins
sometimes
and it scares me.
we burn the pages
of life together
and read
more than twice as fast
as everyone else.
#34 by teeni at February 19th, 2009
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Ooooh! This was a nice change! I have been coming here a lot but I think it has either been a really long time since I’ve seen a poem here or I’ve never seen one until now! Very nice, Bobby!
#35 by Revellian at February 20th, 2009
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@Ernie: Excellent poem! I am imprinting it on my best friend’s wedding invitations:)
@Teeni: Thanks! I have included poetry in some fiction stories recently, but they often go unnoticed as part of something else. I figured why not a love poem betwixt so much violence? LOL!
#36 by Justin Airsoft at February 20th, 2009
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That was a great poem, and interesting how the love poem was initially intertwined with the other stuff, ha.
#37 by Revellian at February 20th, 2009
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Thanks Justin! My next poem will be about hate to balance things out:)
#38 by Eren- homemaking encouragement at February 27th, 2009
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This poem is very beautiful and deep.
I love my hubby so much that sometimes it hurts.
When you love someone a whole lot you’re always reminded of the pain it would be to lose them- like if they died or something.
I try not to think of that- and put my mind to positive things but it’s the feeling that comes when we are together. Very very strong.
I feel fortunate to know true love as many people go through life and never find their soul mate.
Blessings,
Eren
#39 by emila at March 1st, 2009
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hi bobby! happy belated valentine’s day! the card that i sent you for xmas came back to me last week
maybe you were not around.
#40 by Revellian at March 2nd, 2009
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@Eren: Thank you. Yes, you are fortunate to have found your “soul mate” and I hope you two remain together forever:)
@Emila: Awww…I checked my mail every day looking for it but never received it. I’m usually home during the day. I thought maybe it was lost in the mail. It is so wonderful that you thought of me! I’m so sorry I didn’t get to see it.